Dust It Off Bloghop: Day 2




You guys! Seriously, so many great pitches. What fabulous ideas! Theresa and I are going to have a tough time choosing!

For today, the prompt is: Post your favorite excerpt from Ol' Shelvy. 300-350 word limit.

Here's mine from The Mind Writers. For background, Soleil (the MC) is dating Rowen but she has budding feelings for Cooper that she's trying to fight. They've just escaped from Soleil's soul being harbored for the demon and they're all crashing at Rowen's for the night.

          “You’re still awake?”
            Cooper strode into the room. I immediately forced my attention to the previously ignored book in my lap.
            “I’m trying to read.”
            “Huh,” he said.
            “What.” I lifted my eyes, prepared to be annoyed. And I was, but not in the way I’d planned. I looked up just in time to see him lift his brown shirt off and toss it to the side of the couch.
            What was he doing? I had to swallow several times because my tongue tingled at seeing his tan, washboard abs. I cleared my throat and forced my eyes back to the page. The words suddenly morphed into one of those optical illusions that trick with your mind.
            “Didn’t picture you as a book nerd.”
            I made the mistake of looking up at him again. I had to lift my book higher. “Yeah.” I cleared my throat and checked my voice. It was too high-pitched. “Well, there’s a lot of things about me you’ve been wrong about, isn’t there?”
            “Not about this, no,” Cooper said with amusement, and I knew he wasn’t talking about my reading habits anymore.
            I’d never noticed how fast you can start to breathe when you’re bothered, but at this point in time I was running a 5K. I was being unfair and part of me knew it, but the other part was still stewing in irritation.
Unable to help myself, I peered over the top of the book. The muscles in his back swelled as he plucked off the majority of decorative pillows and laid a sheet over the couch. Then he settled in, pulling a blanket over himself.
            “You’re sleeping out here?” I asked with clear disbelief.
            “Yes. Or am I not allowed?”
            I exhaled. “It’s fine—I’m done, anyway.”

Confession: Part of me is still in love with Cooper. Sigh. :-p Is that legal, to be in love with your own characters, lol?


On Monday, get ready to post what you learned from writing this WIP. With each project we take on we become more rounded, better writers, and we want to know what you learned from writing Ol' Shelvy!

Okay, going to check your awesome excerpts out now!!!


22 comments

Suzi said...

Perfectly fine to be in love with your character! Cooper seems to have a sense of humor--like it.

Rachel Schieffelbein said...

Ha. Nice. I wish knew more about what was going on!

Avery Marsh said...

It better be. ;) The trick is to get other people to love them as much as you do, and I think you did a great job of that.

Laura said...

Not at all, I'm in love with Cooper just from this little clip lol.

Morgan said...

I love it! It's weird that you have projects I haven't read, Cort. I want to read them! LOL.

Kyra Lennon said...

I think being a little bit in love with your characters is necessary to make it that little bit more believable! Loved this scene - and I kinda like Cooper too! :D

Elizabeth Briggs said...

Ooh Cooper is hot!

Andrea said...

First of all. I loved this scene! The descriptions were great. I don't think there is anything wrong with being in love with your character, in fact I think its necessary. How else are we going to be able to put in the hundreds of hours of work on a story if we didn't love them? :)

Andrea

E. Arroyo said...

I love this...I felt my heart right there with hers.

elizabeth seckman said...

Totally legal to be in love with him...the readers will be too, though, so don't get too jealous!

Christine Rains said...

Awesome excerpt! Oh yeah, it's totally alright to be in love with one of your own characters. I do it all the time. Makes for better writing. ;)

Juliana Haygert said...

Of course it's legal to love our characters. And apparently I love Cooper too!
Hum, 350 words is too little. Can we have more please?

Tara Tyler said...

awww! of course i love cooper! thats my current mc's name!
love the scene!

Theresa said...

If it's illegal to be in love with your own characters then slap handcuffs on me and put me in jail. lol. That line about how fast you breath when you are bothered is amazing. I read it three times. As hosts of the bloghop I think we should extend the word limit. Once I stop reading I don't want to stop!

Shiela Calderón Blankemeier said...

Wonderful!!! You are so great at writing descriptions - everything is so vivid with a minimal use of modifiers. Great job!!!

McKenzie McCann said...

What was he doing?

Ha ha. That's such a perfectly placed line.

Kate Larkindale said...

Better hope it's not illegal to fall in love with your characters or I'm hung, drawn and quartered already... Great scene. What is that boy up to?

Kelley Lynn said...

Totally not illegal to be in love with them. I like him to! :)

Colleen Chen said...

Ooh, I love that scene! Sexy and brought a smile to my face.

Clare said...

Excellent excerpt , I can really feel the sexual tension.

Amy said...

Ooh, sexy! And yeah, I hope it's legal, too - I've been in love with the MMC of my second book (not the one I'm blogging about in this bloghop), Luke, since I first thought him up...even if he started off as a much less dark and conflicted person. Now he's an unstable victim with a dark secret, I love him even more ;)

Julia King said...

Oh man! That was AMAZING!!! I'm in love with this already. Want more. haha Good job. Wish I'd have known about this blog hop. I'm sort of out of the loop with the blog world lately due to revisions and vacation stuff. Awww shucks, but no wories.

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