Second Campaigner Challenge

This one was definitely a challenge! I had to look up most of those words (since I'm not a human dictionary)!

Here are Rachel's rules for this one:


Write a blog post in 200 words or less, excluding the title. It can be in any format, whether flash fiction, non-fiction, humorous blog musings, poem, etc. The blog post should:
  • include the word "imago" in the title
  • include the following 4 random words: "miasma," "lacuna," "oscitate," "synchronicity,"
If you want to give yourself an added challenge (optional and included in the word count), make reference to a mirror in your post.
For those who want an even greater challenge (optional), make your post 200 words EXACTLY!

I did it. I used every one of the words, referred to a mirror, and all in exactly 200 words, baby! Here it is, in tribute to Halloween coming up next month (which is my favorite holiday):



Far From Imago

Brittney sat on the couch, her nerves on edge from Patches’ ceaseless growls. Except he was in the dated bathroom, growling at the mirror this time instead of at the basement door, a door Brittney had just barricaded with several concrete blocks to keep from opening on its own. The knob turned in the empty silence, grating her nerves.
            Patches barking at the mirror was nothing to oscitate at. Brittney couldn’t help glancing at the rusted vent in the wall. The vent from the basement. An eerie, otherworldly feeling swept over Brittney like never before, pricking the hairs at her arms and neck. More than ever she didn’t want to be in this miasma of a house.
            “Patches,” Brittney said, quivering, her nails digging into the couch fibers.
            In perfect synchronicity the dog’s snarls deepened into barks, the vent leading from the basement rattled as if trying to break loose, and the bathroom faucet shot on full blast of its own accord.
            Brittney screamed—she could practically feel the foreboding presence fill the lacuna cavities in her bones. She shot up from the couch, grabbed Patches and bolted out, vowing to never enter the haunted place again. 



47 comments

J said...

Wow Cortney! That was a sufficiently creepy start to my day. :P Great job!

J. A. Bennett said...

Creepy! I went with a little scary as well :)

Jennifer Groepl said...

I think I'd be out of that house immediately! Yikes!

Angie Cothran said...

Oooo a haunting! I haven't seen this take yet! Awesome :)

Cheryl said...

Delightfully creepy. I would have been out of there like a shot too!

Maeve Frazier said...

Creepy greatness! Nicely done!

Sheri L. Swift said...

Ooooh, I like! Love the photo too! Def wanted to read more! ; )

Cortney said...

Thanks everybody! :D

Peggy Eddleman said...

Fabulous! I loved it!

Miranda Hardy said...

Spooky! Love the haunted house angle. Good job.

Tanis said...

Awesome- now I'll get out my dictionary and read it again!

bridgetstraub.com said...

Here's my question, What was she doing there in the first place? Nice job. Mine is #29

Angelina C. Hansen said...

Thank goodness for Patches!

Jamie McHenry said...

I love it. Great feeling and mood. I think I fixed my blog so you can join. Let me know if it doesn't work. Good luck with the contest

storytreasury said...

Kind of creepy! But I liked it.

Jen said...

I love a good spooky story! Great job!
Mine is #3.

julie fedderson said...

Love this take--totally like Amityville! I am a huge fan of Halloween, too. I already have my costume ready!

Cortney said...

@Tanis, lol I needed a dictionary just to write it!

@bridgetstraub, She lived there!

@Julie, hooray, I have my costume ready too! :D

@everyone--thanks a bunch!!

KSCollier said...

Enjoyed this piece. Very entertaining and loved the haunted house. Good timing for Halloween.
I'm a follower now. #76 is my shot at it. Come on by and linger a while, you might enjoy it, and want to stay.

Francine Howarth said...

Hi,

Oooh, chilling stuff! Kids would go wild for this. ;)

best
F

Nadja Notariani said...

I have to agree with Francine! Kids would absolutely go wild for this! That basement vent created such tension...really well done when coupled with the yapping dog. ~ Nadja

Brinda said...

You did a great job with the words and chose an excellent image to go along with your piece. Good luck with the contest!

Roland D. Yeomans said...

Like me, you thought the supernatural was a "natural" fit for those mind-bruising words! Great entry, Roland

F.E. Sewell said...

What a fun entry! This is the first time I've been entertained by a scary story in this challenge. Great job!

Steph Schmidt said...

I hate creepy stuff but there is some excellent writing behind that entry. Poor Patches.

Leah said...

The tension in this is great. I wanted to run out with her, to be honest.

Great work!

Ms Saba (aka Teacher007.5) said...

That was so scary! No haunted house for me!

lizhellebuyck said...

Love the use of miasma!

Dawn M. Hamsher said...

I'm with Brittney...I'd be out of there!

Good suspense build up.

The Write Soil

My entry is #50.

Medeia Sharif said...

Spooky and atmospheric. I loved your piece.

christyfarmer said...

Great suspense and use of the picture which reminds me of "Ravenhearst" :-)

Susie Medwell said...

Really spooky, you managed to get so much into 200 words!

LadyJai said...

My friends and I used to love to scare ourselves in old cemeteries and empty houses when we were growing up in England! Good post!

David Powers King said...

You captured the essence of a haunted house very well here. Creepy. And who wouldn't love a dog named "Patches." Very cute. And hair-raising!

Great job, Cortney! :)

Cortney said...

Thanks a lot, guys, I appreciate your compliments and comments! :D

Jess said...

Oooh very creepy! I love it! Great job!

(My entry is #113)

Arlee Bird said...

Very spooky. What's in the basement? Maybe we don't want to know.


Lee
Tossing It Out

catherinemjohnson said...

Creepy, spooky, love it! Great pic too :)

Lindsay N. Currie said...

Perfect for the impending Halloween season!! Well done:)

Lynda R Young said...

This is a great entry for the challenge. Nicely done :)

Zan Marie said...

Creepy, good story!

Christine Rains said...

Wonderfully creepy. Great use of the words. Good job! :)

raelynbarclay said...

Nice haunted house type story just in time for Halloween :) Great use of those words.

Ron Smith said...

Nice.

And creepy.

And intriguing.

Well done.

Sher A. Hart said...

Very nice blend of creepy without the bad ending like so many I've read. I'm all for escaping your nightmares. And taking the pets along. Good job!

Karen deBlieck said...

I sort of want to know what is in the basement...and I don't...lol. Great job!

#189

Jessica Therrien said...

Really great and creepy. I loved the description...I could picture everything.

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